托福写作
 
托福写作常见误区二

 

      托福写作词汇是托福写作的基础,因此熟练掌握托福写作词汇是托福写作高分的前提,本文就托福写作中常见错误词汇使用做整理汇总,供考生参考。
  托福写作词汇常见错误主要是分为以六个类别做的整理:容易混淆的词汇、固定搭配问题、表达受中文影响的问题、动词形式不正确以及名词的单复数、冠词的使用及用词与文章风格不符等。
  (三)表达受中文影响的问题
  英语和汉语表达有区别,如果在英语写作中套汉语思维,就是中式化英语的表现。这只能使文章语言蹩脚、冗赘。所以考生在平时阅读英语材料和练习写作时,要注意英语表达和汉语表达的差别,切忌在写作中硬套汉语思维。
  1、Original: If we agree to say that school offers us the best book knowledge acquisition then our society offers us the best surviving techniques in a hard way.
  Revised: If we agree that school offers the best method for the acquisition of book knowledge, then our society offers us the best method for acquiring common sense or “street smarts”.
  Agree to say that表达中式化,只需要agree that即可;the best book knowledge acquisition改为the best method for the acquisition of book knowledge(学校给我们提供了获取书本知识的最好方法)更为恰当,同样,后面的the best surviving techniques改为the best method for acquiring common sense...;加上street marks(街头智慧)给文章的词汇增添色彩。
  2、Original: They can spend more time studying education and communication to improve their role as a mother, wifes and daughter.
  Revised: They can also decide to spend more time studying, education themselves, in order to improve themselves in their roles as mothers, wives and daughters.
  原句中studying education and communication的说法中式化,不符合英语的表述,应该为studying,educating themselves。除了词语表达,此句中还存在其他问题,如名词单复数的使用:不是提高他们的角色,而是提高他们自身以扮演好母亲角色。还有,女性不止一个人。很多人都在扮演母亲角色,role和mother应用复数,故将improve their role as a mother改为improve themselves in their roles as mother;同样,为保持一致,wife和daughter也可用复数,原文中wife的复数写法有误,应该是wives。
  3、Original:If you can get the point of communication by watching TV,will you...?
  Revised:If one can learn about communicating from television,will you...?
  原句的get the point of communication by watching TV表达不清,让人难以理解,应该是指“从电视上学习交际”:learn about communicating from television。
(四)动词形式不正确
  考生容易犯的错误还有对动词在不同地方使用的形式把握不清,有的应该使用动名词的,却直接用了动词原形,有的应该使用过去分词的,却是用了动名词。
  考生需注意以下几点:固定搭配中的动词形式;动名词或动词不定式可以作主语;不同时态、语态中的动词形式。虚拟语气也是写作中容易出错的地方,主要是由于考生在写作中没有使用虚拟语气的意识。所以,在平时考生应该加强对虚拟语气的了解,注意虚拟语气中动词的使用。
  1、Original: So take all the above factors into account,I may not quite agree with the opinion that parents are our best teaches.
  Revised:So,taking all of the above factors into account,I do not agree with the opinion that parents are our best teachers.
  本段开头的so take all… 本应该是伴随状语成分,但作者直接用了动词原形,这是错误的,应该和主句的主语I保持逻辑一致,是作者把以上的因素考虑在内的。除此以外,原句中作者为能明确表明自己的立场,把may not quite agree改为do not agree。
  2、Original:We can enjoy the art of cuisine in cooking rather than tolerating the time-consuming preparation.
  Revised: We can enjoy the art of cooking rather than simply tolerate the time-consuming preparation.
  rather than的前后用此应保持一致,此处rather than后的用词要与其前面的动词原形enjoy保持一致,故将tolerating改为tolerate。原句中还有一个用此问题,cuisine本意为“烹饪”,与in cooking冲突,故只保留一个cooking即可。
  3、Original:Drink water with hygiene will certainly benefit the local folks a lot.
  Revised:Drinking clean water will certainly benefit the local population.
  原句动名词作主语,将drink该为drinking。原句中还有词汇表达问题:干净的水用clean water表达恰当,不用water with hygiene。
  4、Original:The rapid development of science and technology has lead to an increasing need for more relaxation in off-work time.
  Revised:The rapid development of modern economies has led to an increasing need for more relaxation in off-work time.
  原句中lead在现在完成时中应该用过去分词,应该为led。
  5、Original:CCTV 10 is such a channel intended to teach people...
  Revised:CCTV 10 is a channe that teaches people...
  原句中的intend不应用过去分词的形式。
  6、Original:They keep focused on money while friends and families slip away.
  Revised:They keep focusing on money while friends and families slip away.
  focus(聚焦、集中于)此处应该用动名词形式,keep doing“一直做某事”,keep focusing on。
  以上就是托福写作词汇常见错误中动词形式不正确问题汇总,希望大家可以作参考,尽量避免错误。预祝大家取得理想的托福成绩!